Critique on Kinetic Text

First-
The simple three color scheme and one font choice helps the image move through
and stay consistent.  The artist had a mass amount of contrast, and a great message that
engaged me. There are a few points I would change like the smile frown animation. Instead of jumbling off, it should have done something else... or not condensed at all. Also some slight tweaks to
pacing at points with more text, to give the viewer a few more seconds to read.

Second-

Awesome job. My favorite part was the laugh track part with all the Ha's coming in.  Using audio is a big challenge and she did a great job with it.  The end of the flash part with knocking down the stairs isn't quite synced with the words. It's the length of the knocked that throws it off. And perhaps instead of every stair, every other would make it quicker.

Flash works well with playing audio while scrubbing the text. Though someone else mentioned using iTunes while working.


Third-

Interesting job, and her transitions are an interesting choice.   Though the biggest complaint is that the size and speed of the text. My complaint is that the text is white with such a light background,  a darker color would be great.  Though the message of the flash is also lost on me. There's image and text theme, and then there is the poem...

The music is cool, but doesn't quite fit what she was trying to go for.

Fourth-

Alignment isn't quite right on some, and the aggressive text needs to be a different font and more red.
The last feels a little more interacting, which is pretty cool.  The diagonal text would be better in a smooth curve diagonal. However the alignment is throwing me off when they're all there.  Perhaps having more questions coming, or bringing more on the screen, letting pile up with different size.

Fifth-

The spinning subtle background gives and extra sense of space.
With audio it's great. There's a few alignment issues. However his idea to use the camera feature would be awesome.  The various texts went well.  One thing I would have liked to see was LCD-HDTV's animated somehow. Perhaps spelled out, or flash on. But I see again how the camera effect would have made that a lot better.

Mine-

Color code the text a bit better.  Separate fonts, with serifs.  Should be different.
something about sound,  or narration, or sound effects

Some people say that it reads like a book without sound.
Defiantly change the color scheme. Cookies brown does not work well. Brighter/primary color for child.
Brighten up background. Flashing cookie in the background/ low opacity.

Personal notes- Changing some pacing around No, what are we having for dinner, ect.

My assignment:

http://youtu.be/_RMREnH_hX8

(Editing a few things before I re-post it on you-tube.)