Critique for Assignment 4

First:
Pretty good content, and defiantly  a great start. I really liked the list of good things and bad things. I would have enjoyed seeing more links to the words.  To accomplish what he wanted to do it was suggested that he use div tags with png transparent rectangles in it.

Also suggested to take the links he used to more interesting things. Like the best facebook pages, ect.

Second:
Text was all over the page with each new page. That was pleasant. The color scheme is good. However, given the nature of the project, having the links blend makes it not obvious to click.  It was suggested to give the link a background color instead of just having the text change color.  Useful.  Given that the piece was mostly about  time travel and decisions. Someone also suggested that having it all on one page, would fit like a puzzle together. Varying Style of text. Color, font, ect.

Third:
Cash Money! I like the message and vision. The color scheme is simple and fresh. And the links are obvious and simple. A semi-opaque rescript in the background. Formatting it like an ATM. "Do you agree" bits?

Mine:    ad-hoc.zzl.org
- Change background to something not plain/ more tech background.
- Android pic/ robots somewhere.
           - Robot head as the background.
           - Cellphone pic as background.
           - Have text read by microsoft sam. Via quicktime file, ect.
- Make them all pop up in new windows.
- Tying the colors to subject.
- Consistence person/tense.  I spoke neutral then first person.

Fifth:
 Different colors for each topic, some relating to each topic. ie. dark grey for negative, green for help our earth.

Sixth:
Graphics were useful in illustrating what is said. Many questions posed, vs constant speech.  There was a lack of overall consistent layout of  the entire site.

Critique on Kinetic Text

First-
The simple three color scheme and one font choice helps the image move through
and stay consistent.  The artist had a mass amount of contrast, and a great message that
engaged me. There are a few points I would change like the smile frown animation. Instead of jumbling off, it should have done something else... or not condensed at all. Also some slight tweaks to
pacing at points with more text, to give the viewer a few more seconds to read.

Second-

Awesome job. My favorite part was the laugh track part with all the Ha's coming in.  Using audio is a big challenge and she did a great job with it.  The end of the flash part with knocking down the stairs isn't quite synced with the words. It's the length of the knocked that throws it off. And perhaps instead of every stair, every other would make it quicker.

Flash works well with playing audio while scrubbing the text. Though someone else mentioned using iTunes while working.


Third-

Interesting job, and her transitions are an interesting choice.   Though the biggest complaint is that the size and speed of the text. My complaint is that the text is white with such a light background,  a darker color would be great.  Though the message of the flash is also lost on me. There's image and text theme, and then there is the poem...

The music is cool, but doesn't quite fit what she was trying to go for.

Fourth-

Alignment isn't quite right on some, and the aggressive text needs to be a different font and more red.
The last feels a little more interacting, which is pretty cool.  The diagonal text would be better in a smooth curve diagonal. However the alignment is throwing me off when they're all there.  Perhaps having more questions coming, or bringing more on the screen, letting pile up with different size.

Fifth-

The spinning subtle background gives and extra sense of space.
With audio it's great. There's a few alignment issues. However his idea to use the camera feature would be awesome.  The various texts went well.  One thing I would have liked to see was LCD-HDTV's animated somehow. Perhaps spelled out, or flash on. But I see again how the camera effect would have made that a lot better.

Mine-

Color code the text a bit better.  Separate fonts, with serifs.  Should be different.
something about sound,  or narration, or sound effects

Some people say that it reads like a book without sound.
Defiantly change the color scheme. Cookies brown does not work well. Brighter/primary color for child.
Brighten up background. Flashing cookie in the background/ low opacity.

Personal notes- Changing some pacing around No, what are we having for dinner, ect.

My assignment:

http://youtu.be/_RMREnH_hX8

(Editing a few things before I re-post it on you-tube.)

Critque for Assignment 1

There were a lot of good images up for our first assignment. Especially given that most of us haven't done this sort of thing before. I think.

As with any critique I found my own set of likes and dislikes. Along with my own curiosity for how some things were done.

The first set of images was very grungy, but beautiful in a way. The use of black and white photos, with layered text above it was most successful in my opinion, as opposed to the justified text of the other. 

I'll have to remember the layering photo technique for another time. How to make text dirty, and typewriter-esc would've worked a little better for some of the larger words in the image I think. And the 'Kodac' wasn't distracting at all in the background. In fact, it added just the right texture to the whole thing. And gave you a hint to what some of the incorporated materials were. Though I thought it was a negitive of the film. Mm.

I took a few notes down during the critique, but as usual I didn't flesh them out. So some of this, I have no idea what it means.

Courier = my written notes
Where as this = my response. 

images verse text

(No idea on this one.)
Making things with more substance, by using symbols, ect.
(Not sure either, I think I meant backgrounds. Or perhaps the use of the And Symbol in one persons image)
Representing words via pictures.
(I thought to do this at first, in the method of some old childerns books. That would have the picture of a cat, instead of the word. But this really relates more to the second statement below)
What does the word "future" look like/ represent.
(Another snippit from someone's image. They had the words, 'unwritten' and 'redrawn' as litteral interpretations of the words using those words. How would I make future look? Would the word be sleek and refined? Or dirty and un-efficient? Or maybe even a circuit board to represent computers. Would that make sense to others?)
How to represent that with text vs. Pictures?
(Covered by Above.)
Sentences within sentences
(This was much more visual. In two instances. The first, was a sentence written, with other words within the sentence. In a smaller font. The other, was a sentence or two written, with certain words highlighted to create another sentence.)
Text Choice.
(The choice of which the text is most appropriate. Perhaps I meant if something is old, to make the text look old. Or something of the like. Otherwise this is pretty obvious to me.  )
 

My comments [Comments for my critique]-  
 
Not needed photo/picture
(I had an image of a boy screaming, the image wasn't needed as the written sketchy text was enough to say so.)
Changing the text. "ME"
(With the ?! I had [It's actually called something, but I can't remember the name.] IT looked like the written text said Me3l or something.)
Making the text swirls beginning larger, then text smaller towards the center
(My second image was two swirls of text. By doing the above, it made more sense.)
Stronger context on the first one.
(My first image displayed much more of a anger, and had more emotion then the second.)